Any poetical people here?

[Kobes Mummie]

ooo we have our 12 week scan today eek.
DF made me sob this morning showing me this:

I have a beautiful son,
A chirpy lil guy with the cutest twinkle in his eye.
A godson with an imagination which runs extremely high so
Im happier than ever when reaching to the sky,
to meet another who is currently very shy,
I'm gonna be a Daddy,
I'm on top of cloud 9!

He wants to announce to his family using it ")

Can anyone maybe tweek it or does it flow nicely already? What do you think. I didnt know he had this soft side ")

Happpppy xx

 

[MaisyMay]

I've had a few poems published do I'll try and help. It's very sweet my dh sent me a poem after our 12 week scan with ds, it made me cry. Just wanted to check for the wording... Do you already have a ds and your dh has a godson?

 

[hopefulfor1st]

Yes it's sweet buta few things don't make sense, who's the son? And the godson?


Ok after a few reads....
He has a son already, and a godson he must be very close to to mention in this? And he's saying he had these 2 and now he's gonna have another? But not too sure on "reaching for the sky to meet another?" Is that meant to be baby is coming from heaven?

 

[Kobes Mummie]

Confusing family we are
my son is his godson and he has a son himself. Hes not great with words bless him. I think the sky thing was to do with excitement and being on the clouds feeling wise I think xx

 

[hopefulfor1st]

I think to people who know you it will make more sense !

 

[threebirds]

How lovely. I wouldnt change a thing as its his words from his heart and thats what matters.

 

[Kobes Mummie]

How lovely. I wouldnt change a thing as its his words from his heart and thats what matters.

Thankyou so much ") yay x

 

[Islabella]

Aww it's so lovely - and flows well if read with the correct breaks and pauses. Made me all emotional, love it when guys express themselves with words!

 

[Kobes Mummie]

Aww it's so lovely - and flows well if read with the correct breaks and pauses. Made me all emotional, love it when guys express themselves with words!

Ahh thanks. Sobbed a bit hes not like that at all was so sweet xx